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Lost in the great maze I long for the light But the closer I get… 
2011.01.01 2332.00

Lost in the great maze
I long for the light
But the closer I get
The darker it becomes
As the story is told
I embarked on a journey that fateful day
To satisfy the thirst within
To have anything but a normal life
My journey has brought me to many places
But, here now I stare
Into the darkness of the maze
I came here looking for the answer
Only to find questions
Will I find what I seek here?
Or is this another aspiration gone astray?

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2011.01.04 0155.03 (UTC)
I love this concept. However, at some points, extra words almost interrupt the flow you built up, for example, "As the story is told/I embarked on a journey that fateful day," doesn't carry the same tempo as the first four lines, and doesn't quite fit into the pace of the next two lines.

Hmm...
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